Can you kindly tell me that in these 2two E-mails which of the 7c's are missing and why they are missing ? Are these emails concise ? If not, can you tell me what to do to make them concise?
E-mail
1One
Hello,
Thanks for reaching
byout. Thank you for showing us so much! We really appreciate it. This class is for everyone who is either a beginner or the one who is already practicing their makeup. You need to have the passion to learn new things. Products and recommendationsrecommendation lists will be given beforehand. The classes will hebe saved for 2two weeks tofor students to watch later on aswell. Your seat will be confirmed after you’ve made the transaction ofpaid your fees. Please note that you can transfer theyour fees online via bank transfer. The timingstime for that will be from 6.30 onwards. For more details please feel free to send your queries.
For fees transfer
for transferring fees to:
Sameera Shaheen
Meezan Bank
02140103882799

Regards,
Zara
Assistant @makeupstudiobysameera

E-mail
2Two
Dear Khadija Shahid
:

Thank you for your interest
. atAt HBL, we have received your application for the position of Agri Finance Officer-18000008 and are currently reviewing your profile..

If you would like to review your candidate file, click here.

If your profile corresponds with our requirements and if you are shortlisted for the role, you will be contacted by a HBL representative.

Your identification no is 709228
.

We thank you for your interest in our organization.

Best Regards,

Talent Acquisition

Human Resources

Habib Bank Limited

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